For my revision process I need to focus on explaining any scientific jargon I used and changing some of the language so it is not as one side. Some parts of my story are not explained completely like why a headwater is important. I need to explain this better in layman’s terms and also cite my source for that opinion. In my initial edit, my personal opinion came through because of the language I used. I need to identify those sections and changed them to more nonpartisan word choices. I also want to make some of my sentences shorter and less complicated. I think I was trying to get too much information into a sentence when really shorter sentences are clearer.